Last weekend we covered an easy fix for sentences that abused adverbs and adjectives. Now we're going to dive into something a bit more difficult.
The extra wordiness that usually accompanies passive sentences can be vague and unfocused. Nothing will pull a reader from a story more than stumbling over an unclear sentence.
I had this problem with the last few scenes of my WIP. Even during revising, I didn't notice how much I had fallen into passive because those sentences breed like bunnies. Until you've trained your brain to spot them, you might not even notice.
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